From 177d7b07c2eef2043c9b32a9ff87e89bfe835f0a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Shahan Nedadahandeh <snedadah@csclub.uwaterloo.ca>
Date: Sun, 12 Feb 2023 17:31:18 -0500
Subject: [PATCH] Recopied text for intamacy and drugs and post grad page
 (#173)

closes #164

Co-authored-by: shahanneda <shahan.neda@gmail.com>
Reviewed-on: https://git.csclub.uwaterloo.ca/www/cs-2022-class-profile/pulls/173
Reviewed-by: Mark Chiu <e26chiu@csclub.uwaterloo.ca>
Reviewed-by: Tejas Srikanth <tcsrikan@csclub.uwaterloo.ca>
---
 pages/intimacy-and-drugs.tsx | 22 ++++++++++++----------
 pages/post-grad.tsx          | 22 +++++++++++-----------
 2 files changed, 23 insertions(+), 21 deletions(-)

diff --git a/pages/intimacy-and-drugs.tsx b/pages/intimacy-and-drugs.tsx
index eefcbc2..21d0c5c 100644
--- a/pages/intimacy-and-drugs.tsx
+++ b/pages/intimacy-and-drugs.tsx
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Which drugs have you tried/used?"
-        bodyText="A lot of students also experiment with substances during university. However, we can see that most students have not tried drugs that are more harsh than Marijuana, such as nicotine, cigarettes, or mushrooms."
+        bodyText="Many students experiment with substances during university. However, we can see that most students have not tried drugs that are stronger than marijuana, such as LSD, cigarettes, or magic mushrooms."
       >
         <GroupedBarGraphHorizontal
           className={styles.barGraphDemo}
@@ -75,7 +75,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What level of intimacy have you reached?"
-        bodyText="Undergrad is a time when we are surrounded by mostly people of our age and given more freedom to seek out relationships. This is reflected in our data by how many respondents first experienced different levels of intimacy during university. But, it is also worth noting that a large chunk of people did not respond for all of the intimacy levels, showing how they have not yet reached there or are uncomfortable sharing."
+        bodyText="Undergrad is a time when we are surrounded by many people of our age and are given more freedom to seek out relationships. This is reflected in our data by how many respondents first experienced different levels of intimacy during university. However, it is also worth noting that a large portion of people did not respond for all of the intimacy levels, showing how they have not had these experiences or are uncomfortable sharing.
+"
         align="center"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -99,7 +100,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="How many committed relationships have you been in during university?"
-        bodyText="Our respondents most commonly have been in either 0 or 1 committed relationship during their undergrad. On the other end, 5 is the most number of committed relationships indicated."
+        bodyText="Our respondents most commonly have been in either 0 or 1 committed relationships during their undergraduate careers. On the other end, 5 is the highest number of committed relationships indicated.
+"
       >
         <BarGraphVertical
           data={I3}
@@ -110,7 +112,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="How many sexual partners have you had during university?"
-        bodyText="Similar to the relationships question, most people responded with having 0 or 1 sexual partner during univeristy. However, one individual wrote 20, another wrote 50, and most impressively (or not depending on how you want to look at it) another wrote 120."
+        bodyText="Similar to the relationships question, most people responded with having 0 or 1 sexual partners during university. However, one individual wrote 20, another wrote 50, and most surprisingly another wrote 120."
         align="left"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -132,7 +134,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Did you ever date another CS / CS/BBA / CFM student?"
-        bodyText="27 people have dated another CS/CSBBA/CFM student. That’s about 1 in 4 students."
+        bodyText="27 respondents have dated another CS / CS/BBA / CFM student, which is about 1 in 4 students."
         align="right"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -143,7 +145,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="If you answered no to the previous question, did you want to?"
-        bodyText="Out of everyone who answered no to the last question, 28 people out of 70 did want to date someone in their program. That’s a little more than 1 in 4 students, meaning a little less than half of CS/CSBBA/CFA students did not want to date one another."
+        bodyText="Out of everyone who answered no to the last question, 29 people did want to date someone in their program. Dating someone in the same program can be great in giving students something similar to bond over. On the other hand, finding someone with different interests than yourself can also be very fulfilling. "
         align="right"
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
@@ -152,8 +154,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="If you've had a significant other, have you ever roomed together for a term?"
-        bodyText="Out of people who have had a relationship, around half of them have roomed together and the other half have not."
+        heading="If you've had a significant other, have you ever lived together for a term?"
+        bodyText="Out of people who have had a relationship, around half of them have lived together and the other half have not."
         align="right"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -166,7 +168,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Are you currently in a relationship?"
-        bodyText="A little less than half of our respondents are in a relationship as of the time they filled out this survey."
+        bodyText="A little less than half of our respondents were in a relationship at the time that they filled out this survey!"
         align="left"
       >
         <BarGraphVertical
@@ -178,7 +180,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="If you answered yes to the previous question, will you be living in the same city/region post-grad?"
-        bodyText="For those who are currently in a relationship, 25 of them will be in the same city post-grad. The rest are will either be in a long-distance relationship or are currently unsure."
+        bodyText="For those who are currently in a relationship, 25 of them will be in the same city post-grad. The rest will either be in a long-distance relationship or are currently unsure."
         align="right"
         noBackground
       >
diff --git a/pages/post-grad.tsx b/pages/post-grad.tsx
index ef9b43a..e5d9c31 100644
--- a/pages/post-grad.tsx
+++ b/pages/post-grad.tsx
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Do you plan on pursuing post-graduate education?"
-        bodyText="There are a total of 103 respondents. Interestingly, there is a huge number of students not pursuring post-grad learning. Post-graduate education is not necessarly for everyone!"
+        bodyText="There are a total of 103 respondents to this section. There is a large number of students not pursuing postgraduate studies. Postgraduate education is not necessarily for everyone!"
         align="center"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -53,8 +53,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="Have you secured a full time position post-grad?"
-        bodyText="Most students have secured a full time position as they have probably received return offers from the companies they have interned at! UWaterloo's coop program's 2 year worth of work experience also paid off!"
+        heading="Have you secured a full-time position post-grad? "
+        bodyText="Most students have secured a full-time position, but how many of those received return offers from the companies that they’ve interned at? Regardless, it seems that the 2 years worth of work experience in the co-op program has paid off!"
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
           <PieChart data={P2} {...pieChartProps(isMobile, pageWidth)} />
@@ -63,7 +63,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Are you returning to a prior co-op?"
-        bodyText="It’s great to see that most people that have a full-time position have gotten it from a return offer! It goes to show how the co-op program improve the students' employability and allow them to find jobs that they enjoy!"
+        bodyText="It looks like most people that have a full-time position have gotten it from a return offer! This goes to show how the co-op program improves the students' employability and allows them to find jobs that they enjoy."
         align="right"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Where will you be working from post grad? (City, State/Province, Country)"
-        bodyText="The US and GTA/Toronto are huge hot spots here, but it’s great to see lots of that these programs can propel students to go to so many different places. Another noteworthy observation is that most students are going to work in the USA postgrad!"
+        bodyText="New York and California are huge hot spots here, and it’s great to see that these programs can propel students to go to so many different places. Interestingly, a large majority of respondents will be working in the USA post-grad. This brain drain shows the wealth of opportunities available in computer science in the USA compared to Canada."
         align="right"
       >
         <WordCloud
@@ -89,7 +89,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="How many offers did you decide between?"
-        bodyText="Over half of the participants only had to decide between one or two offers! 35% of respondants had to choose between 3+ offers!"
+        bodyText="Over half of the respondents only had to decide between 1 or 2 offers and 35% of them chose between 3+ offers!"
         noBackground
       >
         <BarGraphVertical data={P4} {...barGraphProps(isMobile, pageWidth)} />
@@ -97,7 +97,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="How many onsites/interviews did you get?"
-        bodyText="As lots of people had return offers, it’s only imaginable that a significant portion of the higher end of the onsites / interviews are from the group that didn’t have return offers."
+        bodyText="49 out of 69 respondents had at least one onsite/interview. Out of these students, more people had at least 4 of them! Note that some respondents may not have had any interviews because they could be taking a return offer. "
         align="right"
       >
         <BarGraphHorizontal
@@ -109,8 +109,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="What will be your first year total compensation (salary + signing + first year stock + bonus) in CAD?"
-        bodyText="The tech field has interesting levels of annual compensation, these numbers speak for themselves…😜"
+        heading="What will be your first-year total compensation in CAD?"
+        bodyText="The tech field has interesting levels of annual compensation - these numbers speak for themselves… 😜 Compensation can include a combination of salary, signing, first-year stock, and bonus. Many numbers are converted from USD to CAD. The conversion rate was approximately 1 USD = 1.26 CAD during the time frame of the survey."
         noBackground
       >
         <BarGraphVertical
@@ -122,8 +122,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="What field/career path will you be in post-graduation?"
-        bodyText="Computer Science degrees can lead to so many things these days! Web development is an obvious field with web apps being used everywhere nowadays. Artificial Intelligence and Data Science are also becoming increasingly popular fields as they bring out new methods of solving business problems. Cloud computing is also growing in demand by virtualizing IT infrastructure, reducing its costs, and improving its scalability."
+        heading="What field/career path will you be in post-grad?"
+        bodyText="Computer science degrees can lead to so many different things these days! Web development is a popular field with the presence of web apps. Artificial intelligence and data science are also becoming increasingly popular fields as they continue to innovate our approaches to solving business problems. Cloud computing is also growing in demand by virtualizing IT infrastructure, reducing its costs, and improving its scalability."
         align="right"
       >
         <WordCloud