From 75f90bbb870ebddbb12054af79011b129df04c39 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Darren Lo <dlslo@csclub.uwaterloo.ca>
Date: Mon, 6 Feb 2023 21:54:50 -0500
Subject: [PATCH] darren/mental-health-and-personal-recopy (#170)

Closes #162

Co-authored-by: dlslo <dlslo@uwaterloo.ca>
Reviewed-on: https://git.csclub.uwaterloo.ca/www/cs-2022-class-profile/pulls/170
Reviewed-by: Shahan Nedadahandeh <snedadah@csclub.uwaterloo.ca>
Co-authored-by: Darren Lo <dlslo@csclub.uwaterloo.ca>
Co-committed-by: Darren Lo <dlslo@csclub.uwaterloo.ca>
---
 pages/mental-health.tsx | 61 +++++++++++++++++++++++++----------------
 pages/personal.tsx      | 14 +++++-----
 2 files changed, 45 insertions(+), 30 deletions(-)

diff --git a/pages/mental-health.tsx b/pages/mental-health.tsx
index 66a6c65..96910a8 100644
--- a/pages/mental-health.tsx
+++ b/pages/mental-health.tsx
@@ -33,6 +33,7 @@ import { useWindowDimensions } from "utils/getWindowDimensions";
 import { useIsMobile } from "utils/isMobile";
 
 import { BarGraphVertical } from "@/components/BarGraph";
+import { BodyLink } from "@/components/BlankLink";
 import { BottomNav } from "@/components/BottomNav";
 import { ComponentWrapper } from "@/components/ComponentWrapper";
 import { Header } from "@/components/Header";
@@ -55,7 +56,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Have you struggled with mental health during undergrad?"
-        bodyText="Mental health is a serious issue that affects the well-being of countless students. More than half of our respondants reported that they have struggled with mental health during undergrad. Often times, university can be the cause of stress, anxiety or other forms of mental struggles. Thus, it is crutial to take care of yourself as well as support one another during tough times."
+        bodyText="Mental health is a serious issue that affects the well-being of countless students. More than half of our respondents reported that they have struggled with mental health during undergrad. Oftentimes, university can be the cause of stress, anxiety or other forms of mental health problems. Thus, it is crucial to take care of yourself as well as support one another during tough times."
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
           <PieChart data={H1} {...pieChartProps(isMobile, pageWidth)} />
@@ -75,7 +76,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Do you feel burnout more during co-op or academic term?"
-        bodyText="Most of our respondents indicated that they are more likely to experience a burnout during their academic terms. This could be due to the amount of course work, assessments, and deadlines that must be met during an academic term. On the plus side, co-op terms give students a break from studying."
+        bodyText="Most of our respondents indicated that they are more likely to experience a burnout during their academic terms. This could be due to heavy course work and assessments, as well as interview preparation and co-op search. Co-op terms may be preferred because it gives students a break from studying."
         align="right"
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
@@ -85,7 +86,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Do you feel burnout more online or in person?"
-        bodyText="It seems like both in person and online terms can cause burnouts. Ultimately, it depends on the individual to decide which option works best for them."
+        bodyText="It seems like both online and in-person terms can cause burnout. It looks like for many respondents, being forced to learn online due to COVID-19 has helped a bit with burnout."
         align="left"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -98,7 +99,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Have you ever been to therapy?"
-        bodyText="Although some people have seeked out therapy, this number is less than half of the number of people who reported struggling with mental health."
+        bodyText="The words therapy and counselling are often used interchangeably, but therapy is generally more long-term and focuses on you as an individual. Meanwhile, counselling is usually for a specific issue for a limited amount of time. Although some respondents have sought out therapy, this number is less than half of the number of respondents who reported struggling with mental health. This could speak to the need to have more accessible and available resources in regards to therapy around UW. In the meantime, if you’re struggling with mental health, don’t hesitate to reach out to professionals."
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
           <PieChart data={H3} {...pieChartProps(isMobile, pageWidth)} />
@@ -106,8 +107,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="Have you considered going to therapy?"
-        bodyText="Around half of the people who responded this question reported that they have considered therapy. Again, this is almost double the number of respondents who have actually been to therapy. There might be many factors that influenced their decision, including money, time, lack of availability, and social stigma."
+        heading="If you haven’t been to therapy, have you considered going?"
+        bodyText="Around half of those who responded to this question reported that they have considered therapy. Again, this is almost double the number of respondents who have actually been to therapy."
         align="right"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -118,7 +119,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="If you have considered going to therapy, what factors prevented you from going?"
-        bodyText="It’s almost common knowledge that seeking help from professionals can dramatically improve one’s well-being. However, many avoidance factors prevent people from doing so. According to our respondents, some of the most common barriers for them include lack of information, money, stereotypes, and lack of time."
+        bodyText="Seeking professional help can dramatically improve one's well-being. However, many avoidance factors prevent people from doing so. According to our respondents, some of the most common barriers for them include the lack of information, money, stereotypes, and the lack of time."
         align="right"
       >
         <BarGraphVertical
@@ -130,8 +131,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="Have you ever been to counseling?"
-        bodyText="Out of the 101 people who has responded to this question, 24 reported yes. This number is very similar to the number of people who has been to therapy."
+        heading="Have you ever been to counselling?"
+        bodyText="Out of the 101 respondents who answered this question, 24 said yes to having gone to counselling before. This number is very similar to the number of people who have been to therapy."
         align="right"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -141,8 +142,21 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="Have you considered going to counseling?"
-        bodyText="Interesting, not many of our respondents have considered going to conselling. This is the quit different from the number of people who have considered going to therapy. Perhaps counselling is a generally less well-known service or less referred to terminology than therapy."
+        heading="If you haven’t been to counselling, have you considered going?"
+        bodyText={
+          <p>
+            Not many of our respondents have considered going to counselling.
+            This is significantly less than the number of people who have
+            considered going to therapy. UW Health Services offers great
+            counselling services and resources for all students, you can check
+            them out
+            <BodyLink href="https://uwaterloo.ca/campus-wellness/counselling-services">
+              {" "}
+              here
+            </BodyLink>
+            .
+          </p>
+        }
         align="left"
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
@@ -151,8 +165,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="If you have considered going to counseling, what factors prevented you from going?"
-        bodyText="The factors that limit people from going to counseling are similar to those that limit people from trying out therapy."
+        heading="If you have considered going to counselling, what factors prevented you from going?"
+        bodyText="The factors that inhibit people from going to counselling are similar to those that limit people from trying out therapy."
         align="right"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -166,7 +180,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Have you used UW Health Services for your mental health?"
-        bodyText="The number of respondents who have used UW health Services for their mental health is similar to those who have seeked out therapy or counselling. UW Health Service provides accessible medical services to all students, mental health being one of them. To book an appointment with them, you can call 519-888-4096."
+        bodyText="UW Health Services is a program that provides accessible medical services. It’s great to see a chunk of our respondents were able to utilize it for their benefit and we hope that these services continue to be used even more in the future. University life is stressful, and turning to UW Health Services is something you would not be alone in doing. To book an appointment with them, you can call (519) 888-4096 or email hsforms@uwaterloo.ca if you are unable to book by phone."
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
           <PieChart data={H5} {...pieChartProps(isMobile, pageWidth)} />
@@ -175,7 +189,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="How was your experience with UW Health Services?"
-        bodyText="The general consensus for the services offered by UW Health Services is that they are mediocre and often pretty busy. Here are some of thefeedbacks that our respondents provided:"
+        bodyText="Our respondents have a wide range of opinions and feedback about their experiences with UW Health Services. Here is some of the feedback that was provided:"
         noBackground
       >
         <div className={styles.quotationCarouselContainer}>
@@ -189,8 +203,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="Overall, how would you rate your mental health over your entire undergraduate career?"
-        bodyText="Overall, the majority rated their mental health over their entire undergrad a 3 / 5 or 4 / 5."
+        heading="How would you rate your mental health over your entire undergraduate career?"
+        bodyText="Overall, the majority of respondents rated their mental health over their undergrad career as a 3 or 4 out of 5."
         align="right"
       >
         <BarGraphVertical
@@ -202,7 +216,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="How would you rate your current mental health?"
-        bodyText="Similarity, the majority rated their current mental health and 3 or 4 out of 5. However, more people indicate a mental health score of 4 or 5 out of 5, showing a slight increase in general mental health status after graduation."
+        bodyText="Similar to the question above, most students rated their current mental health as a 3 or 4 out of 5. However, more people indicated a mental health score of 4 or 55, showing a slight increase in general mental health status after graduation."
         noBackground
       >
         <BarGraphVertical
@@ -214,7 +228,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="How much do you value your mental health?"
-        bodyText="Thankfully, most people do highly value their mental health. As shown by the stats, most people gave a score on the higher side."
+        bodyText="Thankfully, most people do highly value their mental health. As shown by the stats, most people gave a score on the higher end."
       >
         <BarGraphVertical
           data={H8}
@@ -225,6 +239,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What are some ways you have kept in touch with others during co-op and the pandemic?"
+        bodyText="Co-op and the pandemic can separate friends you make at UW. However, here are some ways that our respondents kept in touch with their friends."
         align="right"
         noBackground
       >
@@ -240,7 +255,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Please give any general comments about mental health in university."
-        bodyText="With mental health being such a large concern in university, many of our respondents have commented on this topic. First, here are some of their quotes about how UW’s environment affects students’ mental health. On the other hand, here are some quotes our respondents provided that may provide helpful suggestions for improving mental health."
+        bodyText="With mental health being such a large concern in university, many of our respondents have commented on this topic. Here are some quotes from students that describe how UW’s environment affects students’ mental health as well as suggestions for improving mental health:"
         align="right"
       >
         <div className={styles.quotationCarouselContainer}>
@@ -255,7 +270,7 @@ export default function Demographics() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="Do you feel like you have enough support for your mental health?"
-        bodyText="Most of our respondents indicated that they did feel like they have enough support of their mental health. This could come from freinds, family, faculty stuff members, or professionals."
+        bodyText="Most of our respondents indicated that they did not feel like they received enough support for their mental health. It’s important to remember that there are people and services out there looking to help you. UW is a very stressful environment, so don’t be afraid to turn to loved ones or professionals for help."
         noBackground
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
@@ -293,8 +308,8 @@ export default function Demographics() {
       </ComponentWrapper>
 
       <ComponentWrapper
-        heading="Do you feel 'senioritis' at this time?"
-        bodyText="Most students do feel “seniioritis” at the time of this survey."
+        heading='Do you feel "senioritis" at this time?'
+        bodyText="Most students feel “senioritis” at the time of this survey. This makes sense, as they’re so close to being free."
         align="right"
       >
         <div className={styles.graphContainer}>
diff --git a/pages/personal.tsx b/pages/personal.tsx
index 4b18fb1..d5236d9 100644
--- a/pages/personal.tsx
+++ b/pages/personal.tsx
@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ export default function Personal() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What is your favourite memory from your time at UW?"
-        bodyText="Most students' favourite memory relates to their time spent with friends and significant ones! This goes to show how friends are an important factor to our happiness! :D"
+        bodyText="Most students' favourite memories relate to their time spent with friends and significant others! This goes to show how important the people around us are!"
         align="right"
       >
         <div className={styles.quotationCarouselContainer}>
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ export default function Personal() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What is one thing that you wish you could tell your first year self?"
-        bodyText="In summary, don't spend too much time worrying about your grades or coop during university. Develop new hobbies, be more open-minded, and talk to more people! There's a lot to experience in university that you don't want to miss or regret! Drink responsibly!"
+        bodyText="In summary, don't spend too much time worrying about your grades or co-op during university. Develop new hobbies, be more open-minded, and talk to more people. There's a lot to experience in university that you don't want to miss or regret not being a part of. And as always, remember to drink responsibly!"
         noBackground
       >
         <div className={styles.quotationCarouselContainer}>
@@ -49,7 +49,7 @@ export default function Personal() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What is the nicest thing a classmate did for you?"
-        bodyText="Any small act of kindness can make someone else's day and remain etched in their memory for a lifetime! We see that a lot of the respondants' classmates helped them with their assignments and exams. Some participants remember fondly when their classmate asked them if they were ok and struck a conversation with them!"
+        bodyText="Any small act of kindness can make someone else's day and possibly remain etched in their memory for a lifetime. We see that a lot of respondents' classmates helped them with their assignments and exams. Some respondents fondly remember when their classmate asked them if they were okay and struck up a conversation with them."
         noBackground
       >
         <div className={styles.quotationCarouselContainer}>
@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ export default function Personal() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What is the best life hack/tip?"
-        bodyText="We have a range of life hacks around submitting assignments, coding shortcuts, living a healthy life (sleeping and eating well), etc. Take notes! ;)"
+        bodyText="We have a wide range of life hacks about submitting assignments, coding shortcuts, and living healthily. Take notes and use them to your advantage!"
         align="right"
       >
         <div className={styles.quotationCarouselContainer}>
@@ -69,7 +69,7 @@ export default function Personal() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What is the best lesson you learned from your time at UW?"
-        bodyText="In short, always say 'yes' to opportunities as it can lead you to new experiences in life that you may enjoy! A lot of the small insignificant things you worry about won't matter at the end. Take care of yourself. Most importantly, enjoy your life is a message that most students agree with."
+        bodyText="In short, challenge yourself to get out of your comfort zone; new opportunities and experiences can help you grow and you might even find something new that you really enjoy! A lot of the small, insignificant things you worry about won't matter in the end. Most importantly, be sure to take care of yourself, enjoy your life and savour each moment!"
         noBackground
       >
         <div className={styles.quotationCarouselContainer}>
@@ -79,7 +79,7 @@ export default function Personal() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What is one aspect of your life that makes you the happiest?"
-        bodyText="Relationships whether friendships or romantic ones and hobbies are the aspects of CS 2022 students' life that make them the happiest!"
+        bodyText="Both romantic and platonic relationships, as well as hobbies, are the areas of respondents’ lives that make them the happiest!"
         align="right"
       >
         <div className={styles.quotationCarouselContainer}>
@@ -89,7 +89,7 @@ export default function Personal() {
 
       <ComponentWrapper
         heading="What advice would you give current/future CS students at UW?"
-        bodyText="Big recap: Socialize. Take care of yourself and your mental health. Do things beyond school and coop."
+        bodyText="The main takeaways here are to be social, take care of yourself and your mental health, and do things beyond just school and co-op. UW is a truly unique experience and you should try to make the most of all aspects of it!"
         noBackground
         align="center"
       >